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Messages are streaked through
everything
I see.

The dense awe
makes me want to leave
every task completed
and folded up like clean
serviettes.

Sometimes I wake
from autopilot mode,
startled like a
hot-plate reflex,
running into the undying ocean
only to collapse into it,
fully clothed
and soul-drunk
as the waves.
as clean as a newborn's meat.
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swansisters Featured By Owner May 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your work and word choices are amazing!
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: I really appreciate that :heart:
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archelyxs Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
The last stanza. Not to latch onto the praise for "soul-drunk as the waves" but that's spectacular.
I hope you are well, love. :heart:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
awww thank you so much! I really need to check out your gallery! i'm so terribly behind :(
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2012
Ah it's okay! :heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Soul drunk as the waves...wow :)
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: thank you so much :heart:
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Adonael Featured By Owner May 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries :D
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Cobalt358 Featured By Owner May 10, 2012
little karate kicks with words your poems are, really.

i don't think waking from autopilot mode is something that many people do. it's amazing when it happens though, noticing yourself almost as a third person, sitting inside the head and peering out from behind the eyes, the world stops being a movie screen and becomes a real place again. a playground instead of a tv show, it's so easy to just be a passive observer.

that's what the last stanza said to me anyway, powerfully so.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
nawww :hug: thankyou Matt!
I frickin' love your commentary - so well said and so damn true :heart:
BTW, when do you need words for your amazing painting, cos I'm a little fucked with uni at the moment and don't want to rush words for it....cos it's amazing and it deserves my time an effort :)
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Cobalt358 Featured By Owner May 21, 2012
hey natty good to see you :)

seriously just take your time with it, there's no rush to get it finished. i know your going to come up with something awsome and i'd rather wait until your ready to focus on it.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
check ur mail :heart:
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JaySpeirs Featured By Owner May 9, 2012
Really nice poem. So many phrases stand out .... for me it was "dense awe" ... the density of feeling, wonderful.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: thank you so much.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner May 9, 2012
I :heart: the term Soul-Drunk. Makes me want to drink Irish Whiskey and swim in briny waters...
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe :heart: thanks, BT.
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner May 8, 2012   Writer
So refreshing - newborns are really the best symbol for starting over. :heart: "soul-drunk as the waves"

The perfect poem to read before bed. Thanks Natty.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner May 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: you get me. Thank you :heart:
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