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The sections are scattered,
Behind mouse-doors,
Little secret crumbs
That we all miss,
That we all misplace.

I've always been a curious person,
An eye-hole watcher,
A treasure hunter,
The jigsaw queen!

Before I found a womb to grow in
I lived there –
Where all the pieces fit,
Whole as a fresh egg
Sitting in a Cleopatra milk-bath.

There I was,
Forgetting myself
Into memories,
How they tinkle in my mind
Like an old music box,
A cuckoo clock,
Or a midnight owl,
Hooting out old skeleton songs
Into a surreal forever
Fitting into micro moments
Of déjà vu.
coming back to the spirit and timelessness
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2012
A lovely piece. Wonderful job.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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InTheStarryNightSky Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
You're welcome. :aww:
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OLoboCanta Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2012
"Before I found a womb to grow in
I lived there –
Where all the pieces fit,"

"There I was,
Forgetting myself
Into memories,"

I really love those two concepts!
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
so glad to see that :hug: Thank you, dear xx
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012   Writer
"Micro moments of deja vu"! You feel them too? The facade of reality that ripples in a heatwave every so often? And you find yourself in the same calendar, on the same day as a million times before, trying to catch up with the reason why you did what you're doing? Haha, sorry. Got carried away. Your poetry does that to me. :heart::heart:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
omg - you should use that in our collab! effing amazing!
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012   Writer
hehe, ok! or you can. ;)

:heart:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think I will haha :hug:
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retransmission Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012   Traditional Artist
Many great associations and images! "Sitting in a Cleopatra milk-bath" is my favorite line:)
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:) so glad you liked that line hehe :heart: I really appreciate your comments - you're so kind to me!
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DottieOnTheMoon Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This poem makes me feel like a shadow creeping along the floor and the images it sees as it moves. I love this so much. :heart:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow - that's an amazing description :hug: thank you so much, hon x
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DottieOnTheMoon Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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Cobalt358 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
that last stanza is awesome.

these lines in particular are briliant -

"A cuckoo clock,
Or a midnight owl,
Hooting out old skeleton songs
Into a surreal forever
Fitting into micro moments
Of déjà vu."

midnight owls, old skeleton songs and micro moments of déjà vu just leave me drooling on the carpet. spooky and mysterious and somehow playful, like a midnight funpark.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hahah :heart: thankyou so much, Matt! Midnight fun park! Another thing you should paint lol you have too many awesome ideas :hug:
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Cobalt358 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2012
lol, oh god don't get me started, i'm backed up enough. have to admit though, i have been thinking about it :giggle:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hahah :hug: you have too many wonderful ideas!
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Cobalt358 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012
thanks natty, your too kind :hug:
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JStavridis Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012  Professional Filmographer
Exquisite.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: thanks for checking it out.
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JStavridis Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Professional Filmographer
The pleasure is mine.
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
"Forgetting myself
Into memories,"

So very well stated.
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: thanks for visiting, Lance :heart:
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LancelotPrice Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012
My pleasure.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2012
There I was,
Forgetting myself
Into memories,
How they tinkle in my mind
Like an old music box,
A cuckoo clock,
Or a midnight owl


Wonderful.

As are the final two lines.

Nice structure and great tone.

:clap:
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Piscesandthediamonds Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: I really appreciate that, BT - thank you :heart:
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